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Dieselpunk Roaring Twenties. Sarah Zama's Author Blog

8 Sentence Sunday on Dieselpunks #10

dieselpunkssquarelogoSo, what’s this? A character looking herself in the mirror? Dah…

I don’t know if it’s the same for you, but I don’t really like this kind of devise to describe a character, although it seems to be very popular with everyone because it allows to stay more firmly in the character’s POV. I usually prefer giving descriptions of characters though another character’s eyes.
But this passage just slipped into the story because there was an occasion. I mean, Sinéad looks into the mirror because she’s preparing to go out and I had basically never described her before (although there will be a few descriptions later through Michael’s eyes), so I just did it. I didn’t even realised I did it before now.

What about you? Do you use this mirror-trick often, or do you prefer other forms of description?

While she was adjusting her dress, her eyes wandered over her face and  her brows knit. Had she always been that thin and sharp? Her cheeks seemed to be a little hollow, while her chin seemed to be pointier. She didn’t remember herself being like this. Her eyes were also sunken, she thought. Was that tiredness or something deeper? She didn’t allow herself to ponder it. And, oh goodness, her freckles stood out like anything all over her face.

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Did you enjoy my snippet?

If you didn’t, I’m sorry (shed one tear), I’ll try better next time, so don’t give up on me.

If you did, here’s a few things you might want to do.

  1. If you are a dieselpunk or steampunk writer, you might want to join the 8 Sentence Sunday on Dieselpunks‘challenge’.  Head over to Dieselpunks, sigh up and look for the 8 Sentence Sunday on Dieselpunks And join the fun!
  2. If you are a dieselpunk or steampunk writer and you have a blog, you might want to post eight sentence from your work on Sunday and share it. Make sure to leave a link in the comment box below and I’ll be sure to visit.
  3. If you are a historical writer and you have a story or more sent in the Twenties too, you might want to post eight sentence from your work on Sunday and share it. Make sure to leave a link in the comment box below and I’ll be sure to visit.
  4. If you are a dieselpunk or steampunk writer, or if you are a historical writer writing in a Twenties setting or if you are just a reader, by all means leave a comment below. I’ll never oppose to that.
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2 thoughts on “8 Sentence Sunday on Dieselpunks #10

  1. Another good snippet, Jazzfeathers. I have no problem with a character looking at his or her self in a mirror. Real people do it all the time, so why not imaginary ones?

    Incidentally, I joined Dieselpunks, read the ‘8 Sentence Sunday’ thread with interest, wrote a long comment, and split it for length, but it posted blank apart from my name and icon. Pity.

    JTS

    PS Aliens didn’t abduct me but they may have abducted my post!

  2. Hey JT, aliens messed up with your post here too. I’ve only just found it in the spam and rescued it 😉

    Thanks for stopping by and commenting.

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